You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it, You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Manager: I am writing
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letter to ask for
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permission to transfer to the
head
office
of our company for six months. I have worked
at
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in

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our department for several years and have gained a lot
in
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from

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the challenging
works
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that I handled.
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, the opportunity of working in the
head
office
of our company
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attracted me for a long time. The
first
reason that I want to
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this
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is that the
head
office
can provide a more high sight on our business which may be useful for our department.
Also
, the
head
office
lacks
of
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stuffs
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who have
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similar experience and background as me. These two reasons both lead me to make the decision. During the time I am away, I sincerely ask
your
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help
for
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arranging the fairs that were belonging to me. I have detailed the works currently in my hand in a
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document which can help others to
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in fast. Best Regards, Douglas
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