Since the technology is cheaply accessible, parents find it convenient to engage their children with the same. What problem does it cause and what solution can you suggest?
There
have
been Correct subject-verb agreement
has
knowing
that technological advancements are increasing significantly day by day so Replace the word
knowledge
many
parents Change preposition
for many
this
development can cause adverse effects on their children. Furthermore
, technological vehicles are more convenient and flexible of
Change preposition
apply
them
so most parents Correct pronoun usage
apply
thinking about
Wrong verb form
think
this
case have
many negative sides and the young generation will be impacted negatively. I will examine both two sides in Correct subject-verb agreement
has
this
essay.
To begin
with, one of the most benefits
is that technological development can be useful to vast people's Correct word choice
important benefits
life
. Fix the agreement mistake
lives
Such
as people who want any information about something, can access it anywhere or anytime via the internet directly. Especially the
young generation Rephrase
The
like
spending their leisure time with laptops or telephones Replace the word
likes
because
to Correct word choice
apply
playing
online games or Wrong verb form
play
texting
messages to friends. Wrong verb form
text
In addition
, a teenager may desire to connect with their close friend via Facebook or Twitter so this
case has various benefits for all of youthful
.
Replace the word
youth
On the other hand
, many societies and governments believe that some technological vehicles or sites must be restricted to the young generation. Because they can be affected negatively due to
imitating terrible characters in games. Therefore
, many parents agree with this
position due to
numerous drawbacks that might impact their children's life expectations. Also
, spending much
time on the internet Correct quantifier usage
a lot of
has been let
some important diseases. Wrong verb form
can cause
For example
, eyesight, heart disease and
physical issues etc.
Correct word choice
apply
To sum up
, in recent times, however
many individuals should follow their children's activities on the internet
or in technological vehicles despite their complaints. I think that developing skills in Capitalize word
Internet
this
area can be used effectively in people's life
.Fix the agreement mistake
lives
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