Besides a lot of advantages some people believe the internet creates many problems Do you agree or disagree?

Despite the benefits, some individuals are convinced that the internet can produce many issues. I totally disagree with
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web
is able to impact positively and
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and make individual’s life easier
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as keeping in touch with our overseas surroundings. To commence with,
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can bring technological advancements to our’s lives. As an indication of when an increasing number of people are willing to start a new language, they are able to effortlessly use various kinds of youtube channels and websites in order to progress their primary learning skills.
Such
as Netflix where individuals
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are able to learn and
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new language by watching series or movies.
In addition
to
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web
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can create a worthwhile opportunity to communicate with people all over the world without a face-to-face meeting.
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the coronavirus epidemic which is able to influence negatively to people’s lives,
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our life has stopped and we could not meet with our circles in order to mitigate infection and preserve ourselves from any health risks.
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consist
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of some advantageous and disadvantageous features as well as troubles. From what has been discussed above I may conclude that
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web
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has already a basic need for
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and it is considered by people that, it
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individual’s
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life and their contact process with their overseas surroundings by joining Zoom or Skype communication platform with one click during the seconds.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • E-commerce
  • Consumer behavior
  • Virtual marketplace
  • Cybersecurity
  • Digital footprint
  • Return policy
  • Comparison shopping
  • Customer reviews
  • Retail therapy
  • Logistics
  • User interface
  • Payment gateway
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