Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,Some people say that

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computer

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everyday

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can cause more negative than positive effects on our

children

.In my opinion,

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totally agree with

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Firstly

children

's eyes from a young age are having maximum visual acuity. If using

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many times in a day,

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playing

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the game

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will cause eye damage,

children

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and children

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will be prone to myopia and get many similar eye diseases. Vision will be limited and they can

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not

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longer see far,

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adulthood and old age.

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, using a

computer

a lot will limit the development of thinking, only when

children

play

computer

games too much, all

children

's thoughts and actions

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directed at the game, making the child's imagination

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restricted and lose focus on real learning. That makes the development of thinking

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significantly reduced.On another hand,increased risk of obesity.

This

is the most common harm when

children

use

computers

. When

children

are eating or have just finished eating,

children

have not had

time

to digest food or exercise but have sat down to use

computers

for too long can lead to obesity for

children

. Because the foods they just eat, especially the fatty foods that don't work to be digested, will accumulate in the body and lead to weight gain quickly. Specially to mention the impact on

children

's practical life

skills

,learning community

skills

is a necessary element to create success for a child, but if addicted to

computers

children

will no longer be interested in learning community

skills

. The question is if we limit

children

's exposure to

computers

or do not use

computers

when they are young, what will be good?

Children

will have more

time

to spend with relatives and family,

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and develop more real-life

skills

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, they will not suffer from eye problems

such

as nearsightedness...the vision is always guaranteed 10/10 until they grow up. In conclusion,we should not let our

children

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computer

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many times

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a day and

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time

for

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using

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a computer

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computer

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everyday

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can cause more negative than positive effects on our

children

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their eyes.

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