Many working prople get little or no exercise during the work day or in their free time and have health problem as a result. Why do many people do not get enough exercise?

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pathological states might be the most paramount issue that occurs in
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our world significantly in metropolitan areas.There are manifold factors that have contributed to
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and their company's boss.
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with, there are two paramount grounds explaining why people do not have time to do exercise
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Firstly
,
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modern epoch made people work as a
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think about
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themself
. To cite an example, a survey by World Health Organisation has declared that the 80% of individuals facing physical issues are those who don't do regular workouts.
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of enhancing their
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work 24/7 hours with no vocation;
as a result
due to lack of
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they quit their workout. In order to cope with
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constantly _ evolving problems, there are a number of solutions that could be taken into consideration. It is commonly accepted that the industries should arrange their schedules in a way where employees could get enough workhours
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there should be three off days in a week as well as people who are in
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of work should use
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walk all the to office. It is logical to conclude that everyone runs to get high rank without caring
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health;
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by
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adopting some measure like
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walk to
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can resolve
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problem.
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