You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Mobile phones, nowadays,
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essential features with entertainment
also
. There has been a large growth seen in usage hours of smartphones among youngsters. There are several reasons behind
this
situation and I find
this
development more beneficial than negative. Both the reasons and my view is elaborated
further
. The
first
reason for
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of smart devices by youngsters is the social benefit they provide. The
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smart phone
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connected
with
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internet
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the internet
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opens up
the
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large possibilities, from creating new friends to communicating with them over social media.
For instance
, a child in my neighbourhood chats for hours with his school friends over Facebook (a social media) and
also
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time over online video sharing phone application.
Moreover
,
the
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mobile gaming,
specially
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multiplayer games, is another major reason for the situation. Children
plays
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different
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kind of games over mobile for
the
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entertainment purpose and they involve themselves in games in
such
a manner, that they forget about the timing and other work to do.
However
, I believe that smartphones have
also
increased the knowledge of pupils. It has developed some important social skills,
such
as communication
skill
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,
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teamwork
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team work
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and many more, by allowing them to work and play in groups, without the restriction of distance.
In addition
, children can learn through
internet
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the internet
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by
watch
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in online videos and reading articles, which ultimately helps them in their studies as well as language skills.
For example
, whenever my niece
require
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to know about something, he searches it over the internet and learns from it.
Moreover
, multiplayer online gaming improves their multitasking ability and it
also
gives them a competitive environment Overall, I agree that
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of smartphones on regular basis is harmful
for
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them, but if given proper guidance, mobile phones can help them in learning some
life-long
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skills.
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