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All children should study a foreign language in school, starting in the earlist grades. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#children #study #language #school #earlist #grades
Nowadays, it is believed that an international
language
 ought to
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taught
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 in
school
, especially
at
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 earlier classes. I completely agree with
this
 notion as it would help them to be a good user of another
language
 and could access
the
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more job opportunities at work.
Firstly
, if the new
language
 would be introduced
in
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school
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 curriculum
then
 it will help the learner to understand
language
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 easily.
This
 is due to the fact that children have more capacity to learn at
this
 age.
For example
, the students of Sant Xiever
School
 are
good
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user
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users
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 of
French
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Language
 since they learn it in their schools.
Therefore
, it is clear that the more early a person would study a
language
 ,
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 good
user
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 he would become.
Secondly
, there would be
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more opportunities for individuals to work even in
the
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international companies if they studied the
language
 at
school
. As an illustration,
the
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multi-national companies prefer to hire
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multi-lingual employees as compared to others.
Thus
, if the schools would educate their students
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new
language
then
 it would broaden their horizons and could have access
for
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 more vocational chances. In conclusion, studying a foreign
language
 at
school
 would bring many advantages
such
 as being multilingual and could gain more career chances in future.
Hence
,
this
 trend should be included in
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.
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