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The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies.
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The diagram
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the process of making frozen fish pies. Clearly,
this
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 is a complex process that requires a range of
ingredient
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ingredients
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 and workers. Prior to the processing of making fish pies, the potatoes have to be delivered
up
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for up
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 to one month. When the box of potatoes
arrive
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arrives
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,
firstly
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, it should be clean.
Then
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sharp
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sharpen
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 the peel and
putting
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put
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 into waste disposal.
The
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In the
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next
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 step, the potatoes must be sliced in order to boil and chill.
Finally
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, it can be stored. The fresh
salmon
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 should
delivered
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deliver
be delivered
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 12 hours or less before
manufactured
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being manufactured
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. First of all,
the
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apply
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fresh
salmon
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 is added
on
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to
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 lemon juice and salt.
Then
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 steam
to
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in
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 the oven. The
works
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workers
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then
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 remove the skin and bones from the
salmon
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 .
As a result
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, the process may produce waste disposal.
Next
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, the fresh
salmon
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 is inspected by an employee. After preparing peas and sauce, all the ingredients are wrapped simultaneously. Freeze the fish pies for a
while
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, and
it
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they
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 can be dispatched.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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