Some people think that government should invest more money in teaching science than other subjects to make progress. Do you agree or disagree?

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in life individually or as a
nation
. Some individuals say that to become
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,
government
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the government
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should spend more
money
in
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studying
science related
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science-related
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subjects
than other
subjects
like arts and commerce.
However
, I think that
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authorities
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should invest currency in teaching other
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subjects as
subjects
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subjects
much as teaching
science
subjects
.
To begin
with, teaching
science
is very beneficial for a
nation
because in
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today's
todays
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world
all the invention which makes people’s life or a
nation
faster is due to
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of modern
science
.
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People
Peope
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People
use
science
all
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in all
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the
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walks of their life. All the important things that advent till now is just because of studying
science
. So, when a
people
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person
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getting
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gets
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knowledge about
science
that means he/she grasping information about the earth. If a person advent
a
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new things by studying
science
which can be possible is beneficial for the
nation
where he/she lived
as a result
this
country
can make progress by using
this
invention.
This
has
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lead
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to
make
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a
country
valuable
towards
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the other
nation
of the
world
. In
USA
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the USA
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,
for example
, they have
a
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great fame
about
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for
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science
and technology. Because of
this
, they become the headman of the
world
.
Therefore
, the more students studying
in
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science
in a
country
, the higher possibility there will be to become progress.
On the other hand
, governments should
also
invest capital in teaching other
subjects
such
as arts and commerce cause a
country
can not improve their status by only improving
science
departments. How developed a
country
depends
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is depends
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on how well
their
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its
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all education sector
.
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is.
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Studying arts and commerce
subjects
can improve a person’s position as well as a
nations
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nation
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. Many countries produce famous
businessman
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businessmen
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who gave their
country
a huge amount of VAT every year from their business and most of those people were not studied in
science
, they
were
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studied in other
subjects
.
For instance
, Zakma- the founder of the most growing e-commerce site ‘Alibaba’-
his
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country
(china)
earn
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earns
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a plenteous amount of
money
from his e-commerce site. Due to
his
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its
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reputation, china gets lots of investment from the
world
.
Hence
, spending
money
on other
subjects
can be
being
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a way of
development
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for
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a
nation
. In conclusion, without
developing
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a developing
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education
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an education
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system, a
nation
can not progress
his
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value
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in front
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in-front
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in front
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of the
world
. For
this
some people say, a
country
should invest
money
more in
science
departments than other sectors. My opinion is to spend
money
on both
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division
equally.
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