Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with.

In
this
state-of-the-art era, trying different things
in
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different
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age
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is very common. Trying new places to
visit
and different
type
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types
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of
food
is very common in some individuals. But some
people
think that
their
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should be no
change
in their routine.
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essay
relevant
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both
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plausible
reason
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mention
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in the following paragraph.
To begin
with, trying a different type of
food
and visiting different places encourage individuals to explore their knowledge and taste. By visiting at different cities help
people
to know about their
culture
and their foods. Cities
helps
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pupils
to enhance their skills in
different
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way and can able to get better jobs in their skills. By trying different
food
we can get
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taste
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and can know how it feels. Many
pupils
can understand not only history but
also
about
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their
culture
. To cite an example, in Canada many
people
from different countries
visit
to
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for exploring
the
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nature and their
culture
. Folk are
also
interested to try their foods
also
because they are very delicious.
However
, some folk keep doing the things
in
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which they are familiar. Individuals of the age
of
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mid
50's
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are thinking that work and
food
must not be
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change
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because they are used to it.
Pupils
like aged only
donot
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do not
don't
want any changes in their routine. Those
people
donot
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do not
don't
like to travel to new places and
donot
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do not
don't
like
a
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international fast
food
.
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of
traveling
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to
new
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a new
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place they always
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want
wnat
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want
to
visit
to
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relegious
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religious
place and traditional
food
only.
For instance
, in Brazil, their
pupils
didnot
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did not
like to
visit
to
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any countries or they only like their
traditional
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and
culture
which they have. Because of
this
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thinking
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Brazil is far from their knowledge and technology. To conclude, in
this
dominating era,
change
is very important,
change
in life,
food
, and trying something new is very important, though that only folk can be knowledgeable and can settle wherever they want.
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