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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with.

#people #places #visit #food
In
this
 state-of-the-art era, trying different things
in
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different
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age
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 is very common. Trying new places to
visit
 and different
type
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types
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 of
food
 is very common in some individuals. But some
people
 think that
their
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 should be no
change
 in their routine.
This
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relevant
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both
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 plausible
reason
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mention
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 in the following paragraph.
To begin
 with, trying a different type of
food
 and visiting different places encourage individuals to explore their knowledge and taste. By visiting at different cities help
people
 to know about their
culture
 and their foods. Cities
helps
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pupils
 to enhance their skills in
different
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 way and can able to get better jobs in their skills. By trying different
food
 we can get
different
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taste
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tastes
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 and can know how it feels. Many
pupils
 can understand not only history but
also
about
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their
culture
. To cite an example, in Canada many
people
 from different countries
visit
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canada
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 for exploring
the
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nature and their
culture
. Folk are
also
 interested to try their foods
also
 because they are very delicious.
However
, some folk keep doing the things
in
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 which they are familiar. Individuals of the age
of
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mid
50's
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 are thinking that work and
food
 must not be
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change
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 because they are used to it.
Pupils
 like aged only
donot
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do not
don't
 want any changes in their routine. Those
people
donot
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do not
don't
 like to travel to new places and
donot
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do not
don't
 like
a
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 international fast
food
.
Instead
 of
traveling
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travelling
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 to
new
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a new
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 place they always
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want
wnat
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want
 to
visit
to
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relegious
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religious
 place and traditional
food
 only.
For instance
, in Brazil, their
pupils
didnot
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did not
 like to
visit
to
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any countries or they only like their
traditional
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traditions
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 and
culture
 which they have. Because of
this
mind
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 thinking
the
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Brazil is far from their knowledge and technology. To conclude, in
this
 dominating era,
change
 is very important,
change
 in life,
food
, and trying something new is very important, though that only folk can be knowledgeable and can settle wherever they want.
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