Some people say that instead of seeing the internet as a way of opening up new possibilities worldwide, we should be concerned about the effect this is having on social interaction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Several people claim that we should be concerned about the impacts
internet
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on us
instead
of always perceiving it as a key that positively opens up new possibilities over the world.
This
stance somewhat suits mine. While the
internet
is reasonably advantageous for the younger generations, it can negatively affect us.
Firstly
, users should be aware that the online environment
also
poses threats. Many young teenagers, even children are actively sharing their data on social media, unaware of the risks they are stepping into. Many online attacks, scams and other actions are directed
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those groups of people.
Secondly
, they will unconsciously leak data to profiting businesses. A lot of information is vulnerable,
such
as house address,
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, these are dangerous to be revealed to the public.
Consequently
, social media will leave many insecurities in their later life and will face a hard time interacting with others. It is not only dangerous,
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but the internet may also
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internet
may shape your
personalities
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,
opinions
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in a negative way. As the users keep on using
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, they will lose their own voice. Their views will be based completely on what others deem them to be.
Additionally
, there is
also
a high chance that they will be influenced by degrading
internet
culture.
For example
, explicit, hateful content.
As a result
, some parts of the
internet
would be a very harmful place to thrive, or to learn from, which
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will change your behaviour or social interactions. In conclusion, while
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can be good, it
also
can harm your social perspective.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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