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Some people think high school graduates should travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to study at university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches.

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There are varying opinions on what high school
students
 should do once they graduate. While some believe that they should either work or travel before going to university, other people think
otherwise
.
This
 essay discusses the benefits and pitfalls of either going to college directly or not.
Students
 may need some life experience in order to appreciate it before they go to tertiary education. Since high school
students
 have little to no knowledge about what they would like to do in life or what they want to study,
this
 quickly becomes an issue once they start schooling. College
students
 tend to either change courses simply because they realized that the course that they took was not the one that they liked or enjoyed. Spending
time
 to think things through can greatly help the youth find their true calling, whether it is to spend more
time
 studying or not.
On the other hand
, some
students
 do not have the luxury of
time
. With some children wanting to graduate as soon as they can to be able to provide for their families;
this
 is not a rare occurrence. Some
students
 want to finish their studies as soon as they can to be able to become independent from their families. People have their own circumstances on why they choose to pursue their studies as fast as possible. In conclusion, some children may want to spend some
time
 gathering their thoughts and make sure that they are making the right decision before going to a university, while other
students
 want to finish as quickly as they can to help their
family
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 and gain independence.
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