Some people think that art is waste of time ,while others have a different view.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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contemporary epoch,whilst some people hold the view that

art

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is a quintessential

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subjects

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, opponents and I believe that it is not crucial,because it

waste

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time .My contention will be

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explained To embark on, despite agreeing that

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play a key role,as it

enhance

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enhances

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cognitive

cognative

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skills of pupils, l believe that it

waste

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our time and we have to learn practical

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such

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as science ,Mathe and biology.In

other word

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,if the students learn core

subjects

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,these

are not only ensure

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a thriving job, but they

also

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considered a gateway to

attain

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apply

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prestigious

universities

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university

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,what can be said is that schools should

interested

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interest

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in teaching scientific

subjects

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rather than

art

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or music .

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, musicology affected positively

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apply

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studies ,as it helps

the

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scholars to understand

their

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complex

subject

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subjects

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such

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as Math or science.To illustrate, if students listen to music ,

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will help them to

be relax

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and get rid of stress .

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, the Ministry culture in Egypt,

care

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for

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lure

students' attraction

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to learn more about

utilization

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of musical instrument in order to raise the educational level .

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, everyone

have

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wide

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widen

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their knowledge

with

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art

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and music. In conclusion,after

this

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essay has manifested the

above mentioned

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points, it can be

raiterated

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reiterated

that

studing

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studying

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has its merits and

demirts

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demerits

, but I am convinced that the authorities should

investe

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invest

in all school curriculum.

dr.taghreedm2030

Aug 1, 2022

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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225 words

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