Some people think that art is waste of time ,while others have a different view.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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contemporary epoch,whilst some people hold the view that
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is a quintessential
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, opponents and I believe that it is not crucial,because it
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time .My contention will be
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explained To embark on, despite agreeing that
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play a key role,as it
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cognitive
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skills of pupils, l believe that it
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our time and we have to learn practical
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,
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as science ,Mathe and biology.In
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,if the students learn core
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,these
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a thriving job, but they
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considered a gateway to
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a
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prestigious
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.
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,what can be said is that schools should
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in teaching scientific
subjects
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rather than
art
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or music .
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, musicology affected positively
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studies ,as it helps
the
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scholars to understand
their
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complex
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such
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as Math or science.To illustrate, if students listen to music ,
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will help them to
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and get rid of stress .
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, the Ministry culture in Egypt,
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for
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lure
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to learn more about
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of musical instrument in order to raise the educational level .
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, everyone
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to
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their knowledge
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art
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and music. In conclusion,after
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essay has manifested the
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points, it can be
raiterated
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reiterated
that
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studying
art
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has its merits and
demirts
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demerits
, but I am convinced that the authorities should
investe
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invest
in all school curriculum.

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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