IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The best way to solve the world's environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world #cost #fuel #cars #vehicles
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
These days, pollution is increasing dramatically by many factors, and it is believed that raising the
cost
Use synonyms
 of transport will be the best way to solve
this
Linking Words
 global issue.
Although
Linking Words
people
Use synonyms
 may agree with
this
Linking Words
 way, I fundamentally disagree with some aspects of
this
Linking Words
 action. There might be several arguments in
favor
Change the spelling
favour
show examples
 of increasing the
cost
Use synonyms
 of
fuel
Use synonyms
 for cars and other vehicles.
First
Linking Words
 of all, there will be some
people
Use synonyms
 who cannot afford the new price of
fuel
Use synonyms
.
For example
Linking Words
, they have to pay more for petrol
then
Linking Words
 their expenditure has to increase, and their income may not come to that expectation.
Secondly
Linking Words
, if the government increases the
cost
Use synonyms
 of
fuel
Use synonyms
, there might be no change because
people
Use synonyms
 still keep using the transport for their work and study.
Consequently
Linking Words
, the problem has not been solved but
people
Use synonyms
 will have some difficulties in
Correct your spelling
life
Correct pronoun usage
their lifes
show examples
lifes
Correct your spelling
lives
show examples
.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the growth of
cost
Use synonyms
 in
Use synonyms
fuel
Add an article
the fuel
show examples
 may have considerable benefits in reducing many types of pollution.
Initially
Linking Words
,
instead
Linking Words
 of driving cars, or other vehicles,
people
Use synonyms
 will try riding bikes to improve the condition of the environment.
Secondly
Linking Words
,
people
Use synonyms
 will have a chance to reinvent their consumption,
for instance
Linking Words
, depending on their income, they will calculate the average money they should spend on
fuel
Use synonyms
 and other essential activities. To sum up, to deal with the world’s environmental problem, increasing the
cost
Use synonyms
 of
fuel
Use synonyms
 for vehicles is not the best solution, and I am strongly in
favor
Change the spelling
favour
show examples
 of remaining the unchanged
cost
Use synonyms
 in
this
Linking Words
 field.
Submitted by nguyenminhman21691 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: