Children now adays spend a great deal of time watching television, however, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool which is why children are less well- educated today to what extend do you agree or disagree.
In
this
contemporary era, Internet
has been a boon to a society where the computer has replaced all other old-fashioned methods of learning. Kids do tend to spend a lot of duration on the screen rather than studying from books. I disagree with the above statement that children watching television tend to be less well-educated.In the upcoming paragraphs, I will Add an article
the Internet
thorough
my points.
Correct your spelling
through
Firstly
,technology has replaced all previous methodologies to grow and build thus
why can't studies be a part of it,the benefits of e-learning are detailed content of subjects, e-books easily available and affordable with the vast expansion of the internet all over the globe,world-class lecturers available online with their experience. For example
, In this
Pandemic era ,it was difficult for cohorts to migrate to other countries for higher education where online courses were the only options left.As per the survey of Oxford University, the results of such
students proved to be extraordinary compared to the old-style method of attending college.
Furthermore
, online courses have more benefits as it
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they
saves
time and money which Correct subject-verb agreement
save
put
less burden on their parents because of Wrong verb form
puts
which
they tend to study more subjects and courses at a time with management skills which prove to be additional benefits in Correct pronoun usage
this
long
term apart from Correct article usage
the long
it
they even get time to nourish their other skills at the same moment.Correct pronoun usage
apply
For example
, Tejas, a Nirma University student studied MBA as well as
passed UPSC in the same period. Although
the human touch may be lost ,being on screen for a long duration may prove fatal to the eye yet the pros overweigh
the cons.
Verb problem
outweigh
To conclude
,the world is moving at a faster pace and to run with it new methods have to be adopted.Self-dedication can prove no new reforms can change their goal.Submitted by 56tushar on
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