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Some people think that girls should take their husband's name after marriage while others feel that they should not follow this age old tradition. What is your opinion?

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It had been a custom to carry the family
name
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 of the husband for women after
marriage
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.
While
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 some people believe that
this
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 tradition has to be respected even in modern times, I argue that the family
name
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 has no significance in one’s
life
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 and changing names only creates hassle and loss of self-respect.
To begin
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 with, a woman has already been named after her parent’s family and her contributions and achievements in
life
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 so far are credited under the same till her
marriage
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. In modern days, as women are getting married around the age of 30, which is nearly half of their average
life
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 expectancy, they could lose the credibility and popularity gained over the long period after converting their names.
For example
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, Sania Mirza, who was a popular tennis sportswoman, did not change her
name
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 after
marriage
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 which
otherwise
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 could have led to recognition problems.
Hence
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, the
name
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 change is not so beneficial for women with a lot of pride and achievements since their birth. The second significant problem with the modification of
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name
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a name
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 is that it comes with the complexity of changing numerous existing
documents
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.
While
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 the woman’s identification
documents
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 issued by the government of the originating country are all
on
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in
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 the old
name
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, they need to be reissued with the new
name
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.
For instance
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, in India,
documents
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such
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 as
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an adhar
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adhar
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 card, passport, Permanent Account Number and driving licence are to be reauthorized with the new
name
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 and it takes away a lot of energy and time as the turnaround times are high.
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, it makes a woman’s
life
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 easier to carry the same
name
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 post-
marriage
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. In conclusion, the long-drawn tradition of carrying the husband’s
name
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 is not relevant in the new age generation as I strongly believe that it loses credibility achieved for all those years till the
marriage
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 and
also
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 creates hassles in converting the identification
documents
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.

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task response
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task response
Clear and compelling arguments presented with relevant examples.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural tradition
  • Identity
  • Deep-rooted
  • Symbolizing
  • Dilute
  • Equality
  • Individuality
  • Partnership
  • Preserves
  • Practical implications
  • Hassle
  • Professional recognition
  • Continuity
  • Personal brand
  • Implications
  • Perceptions
  • Administrative matters
  • Pressures
  • Social expectations
  • Personal preference
  • Global perspectives
  • Changing norms
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