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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #attention
Commercials have been a means of promoting the company
products
 which effectively attract customers to make
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a purchase
the purchase
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purchase
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 of them.
However
, there are some opinions that these ads are not trendy as they used to be,
thus
people
 no longer take notice of them. In my point of view,
although
 advertising doesn't guarantee
people
's attention all the time, it is still a way to draw a number of attractions to buyers. There are two major reasons why marketing is popular in making
people
 feel like buying commercial
products
.
Firstly
, consumers choose to pay for a product or not after evaluating its values displayed
on
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 ads. In order to make a stand in the domestic or international market, new companies have to make an effort to gain more followers through means of advertising. As commercials appear on various platforms, the information of new
products
 can have a chance to be known to lots of
people
 and good features
such
 as health-oriented benefits, delicious
flavors
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 or entertaining purposes are those playing important roles in
people
’s decision to pay or not.
Furthermore
, purchasers tend to buy things after seeing beautiful promotion videos and attractive deals informed in marketing. Many firms invest quite an amount of money in marketing by hiring professionals designing and
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expertises
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on
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 creating public relations.
Also
 by focusing on human nature like paying less money when shopping, companies use it as an effective trick to attract more bills by showing discounts
in
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 the price of
products
 and promotional sales.
On the other hand
, marketing can be bothersome and no longer interesting to customers. It can cause annoyance to the experience of viewers when it shows up causing a disruption during their time watching movies or shows,
thus
 considerably dropping their mood and leaving a bad impression on
people
.
Moreover
, the repetitive appearance of old marketing makes itself become boring, lacking creativity as common companies are using the same motif in their promotion videos. In my perspective, advertising still remains a useful, effective way to attract consumers' attention and the producers should make an effort to change their ads to be more refreshing and find a way not to cause discomfort to buyers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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