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Some people think that best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Other however believe that there are other alternatives ways of reducing crime. Discuss your opinion?

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Crime
 is an issue that almost all counties in the world
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 to deal with. While there are several
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arguments
arguements
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arguments
 on how to reduce the
amount
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 of crimes being
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committed
commited
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committed
, it is clear that steps must be taken to
further
 decrease
crime
 and keep the community safe.
This
 essay argues that there are alternatives
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 reducing
crime
 other than simply increasing time served in prison,
such
 as improving the educational
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system
sytem
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system
 to help
people
 secure better jobs, as well as providing rehabilitation for persons who have
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committed
commited
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committed
 a
crime
.
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Firstly
First
, a lot of
people
 end up doing illegal deeds because of financial difficulties. Right now, a lot of aspiring workers cannot find a job because they lack certain educational attainments.
Therefore
, life circumstances force them to do
crime
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 to simply survive everyday life. In order to prevent
this
, having a better system that allows more individuals to study at a more affordable price can help them land a job much more easily.
In addition
, rehabilitation programs that help criminals should be more prevalent in order to lessen
crime
 rates. As many crimes are caused by repeat offenders, criminals need aid in order to deter them from doing
crime
 again, especially after being set free from prison.
For instance
,
reformees
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reformers
reforms
 who help troubled children who do minor
misdemeanors
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 frequently report that these children do not repeat
their
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 bad actions again. By making giving these
people
 a
second
 chance, they are less incentivizes to go back to a life of
crime
 again. In
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conclusion
conclsion
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conclusion
, there are other ways of reducing
crime
 rates other than by simply increasing
jail
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 time of inmates. Things
such
 as providing better education, as well as reformational programs can decrease the
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likelihood
likehood
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likelihood
 of
people
 doing criminalistic
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activities
activites
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activities
.
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