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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Modern technology has made it easier for individuals to download copyrighted music and books from the internet for no charge. To what extent is this a positive or a negative development? You should write at least 250 words.

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It is true that due to
advancement
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 of
technology
every one
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everyone
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 wanted to be friendly with it
however
 most
of
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individuals
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the individuals
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download
copyright
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 books and
music
 without
pay
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 any kind of charge from the internet with the help of modern
technology
.
This
 phenomenon has positive
development
 sometime it has deleterious
development
 which I will discuss in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with,
Firstly
, with the help of
technology
 masses can get
alot
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a lot
 of benefit in their daily routine
such
 as they
download
 so many
usable
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 application which
help
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helps
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 them to enhance their knowledge
moreover
, they can use that kind of application at
anytime
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any time
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 and anywhere .
for example
, according to the survey there is 90% of people who use the new
technology
 and
download
music
 which
help
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 them to reduce their stress.
Secondly
, they get copyright books which help them to enhance their book and
try
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download
 any kind of book which they need that help them to boost their knowledge and they
awer
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were
 about
alot
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a lot
lot
 of thinks. On the flip side of
this
,
it's has
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it has
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 some negative
development
 fist and foremost
music
 industry have
alot
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a lot
 of losses when individuals
download
 copyright
music
 and they
also
 face
somany
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so many
many
 problems. In conclusion,
although
this
 statement
have
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has
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 some
determine
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 effects yet it's
also
have
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had
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 positive
development
 on society
that
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the
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 masses gat
also
of
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profit and they
also
 increase
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their
thire
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their
 knowledge regarding their studies.
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