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what are the advantages and disadvantages of living in an extended family?

Nowadays, there are a lot of people who live with their relatives
such
 as
grandparents
, uncles and aunts
besides
 their
parents
. These families are called extended families.
However
, Living
in
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 an extended family has both good and bad sides. In
this
essay
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 I will discuss both sides.
To begin
 with, one of the advantages of living in a big family is that children get much more love and attention from their
grandparents
 than their
parents
.
This
 means
parents
 are usually busy at work. But,
Grandparents
 have enough time to play with their grandchildren as they are retired.
Moreover
, it is economical to live with
grandparents
. Because if you live in a nuclear family, you will have to spend more on bills and shopping
more
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than living
in
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 your extended family.
Therefore
, it is widely suggested to live with your relatives rather than apart.
On the other hand
, Children are usually playful and make lots of noise around the house.
However
,
Grandparents
 don`t always like much noise.
As a result
, they punish their grandchildren and warn them not to make
loud
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 noise.
In addition
, you can`t be independent if you live with your
grandparents
.
For example
, if you use your phone a lot or want to do something you like, They usually criticize you and complain to your
parents
.
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