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Cyclists and car drivers sharing the same roads causes some problems. What are the problems and what can be done to reduce them?

#cyclists #car #drivers #roads
In recent years, the population in the countries has
rose
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 dramatically, the space is not enough for most
of
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people
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 to maintain a high quality of living and the
roads
 are too
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 for cyclists and
car
 drivers to drive simultaneously. In
this
 exam, I will show the
the
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problems
what
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 may cause and three
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strategies
stratigies
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strategies
can
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 be done to reduce the tragedy. Cyclists and
car
 drivers sharing the same road is very dangerous
which
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 may cause
a
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traffic congestion. It is hard for riders to see the back sight which may result in
the
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car
 accidents,
moreover
,losing their life.
On the other hand
, cars driving speed is
more
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faster than bicycles, making
the
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rush hour
in
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the
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peak time. In order to avoid the phenomena,
firstly
, the government should take the
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responsibility
rsponsibility
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responsibility
 to deal with the problems, making more appropriate
roads
 for cyclists to save their
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security
secrity
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security
 and life.
Moreover
, the majority must enhance
individual's
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 conceptions of taking mass
transpotation
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transportation
 to reduce the
using
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 of the
roads
. The most important is that people should take care of the rounding situation when they are driving, saving others and
proctect
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protect
 ourselves. In conclusion, it is not
safety
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 when riders and
car
 drivers
sharing
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 the same
roads
, which may damage
others
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 life and
seriously
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 traffic jam. People
having
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 the awareness of danger and the government starts to cope with the problems,
the
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society
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 issues may
be reduce
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.
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