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Everyone should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity. How far do you share this viewpoint?

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Increasing
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 rate of poverty in many countries causes
charities
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 operations
become
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 considerably significant. It seems to me that devoting part of
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wage
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 to
charities
 by everybody is not
correct
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 idea, and I will explain why in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, if all the
people
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obligate
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 to pay
money
 to
charities
,
governments
 will ignore to do their duties
about
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 the poor, and use
money
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the money
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 for other inconsequential goals.
For example
, some
governments
 spend a large amount of finance for vain wars in other countries. The
second
 factor negative factor is that
some times
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NGOS
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NGOs
 are not able to manage financial issues as result, they will not outlay
money
for
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needy
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the needy
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.
For instance
,
charities
 hold ceremonies and spend lots of budget
for
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 it, and waste it.
This
 leads us
on
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final
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, many
people
 do not have enough
income
 to dedicate a part of it to
NGOS
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NGOs
.
In other words
, sometimes because of some events
people
 have to overspend, and they will be under pressure by paying
money
 to
charities
.
For example
, after a terrible accident, it is necessary to disburse
income
 to repair the car, so
income
 and expenses will be
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. It is true that
,
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 some believe
people
 must contribute to
charities
, because they identify
destitute
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the destitute
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 correctly, and support them. Despite
this
, most of the time their opportunities are not successful. To conclude, because of the factors like
governments
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governments'
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 neglect
to
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of
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 the poor, imbalance
income
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of income
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 and expenses, and
NGOs
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Ngo's
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 wrong
money
managements
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management
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 donating
income
 to
charities
 just by
people
 is not
appropriate
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an appropriate
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 solution.
Therefore
,
governments
 should be obligated to devote a
considerably
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 budget to
charities
 and control their opportunities too.
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