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Multiple-culture societies, in which there is a mixture of many ethnic peoples, bring more benefits than drawbacks to a countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The graphic illustrates the
number
 of tourists travelling
in
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 a particular
island
 of the
Carbibbean
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Caribbean
 between 2010 and 2017. To summarize, total visitors continuously increased for 7 years, except between 2015 and 2016. The
number
 of
travellers
 who
staying
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stayed
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 on cruise ships and
island
was fluctuated
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fluctuated
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. The highest
number
 of visitors who
staying
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 on the cruise ship was 2
million
 in 2017.
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 the highest amount of
travellers
 who
staying
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stayed
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 on the
island
 was 1.5
million
 between 2013 and 2015 . And in 2017, it reached 1.5
million
visitor
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, too. The highest amount of total
travellers
 in the Caribbean islands was 3.5
million
 in 2017. The lowest
number
 of visitors who
staying
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 on the cruise ship was half
of
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0.5 in 2010 and the lowest amount of
travellers
 who
staying
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 on the
island
 was approximately 0.75 in 2010. In 2010, was the lowest total
number
 of people visited
in
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the Caribbean
island
.
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