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The line graph indicates how many
tourists
visited a particular Caribbean
island
and where they lived in a period of seven
years
: 2010 to 2017 Overall,
this
island
welcomed more
tourists
over the period shown. Staying on
island
was more prevalent than staying on
cruise
ships
from 2010 to 2015 but the pattern reversed in the
last
two
years
.
Initially
, 1
million
tourists
set their footprints on
this
island
. Despite a stability from 2015 to 2016, there was a relatively steady rise in the quantity of
tourists
paying visits to the
island
to 3.5
million
in 2017. As for their accommodations, in 2010, three quarters of the total of
tourists
dwelled on
island
and the rest lived on
cruise
ships
. During the
first
five consecutive
years
,
tourists
preferred staying on
island
to on
cruise
ships
. To specify, the figure for the former accommodation rose to a high point of 1.5
million
in 2013 and stabilized in the following 2
years
. That of the latter type, after some fluctuations, kept rising to approximately 1.3
million
in 2015.
However
, in the
last
2
years
: 2016 and 2017, staying on
cruise
ships
outnumbered living on
island
, with the figures reaching 2 and 1.5
million
.
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