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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken legally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

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Over the
last
 few
decades
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 there has been a major increase
of
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 tourism around the world, which made English the most popular
language
. For
this
 reason, some
people
 state that in the future English will be the only legal
language
 to be spoken. In
this
essay
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 I will explain the advantages and a disadvantage of having a universal
language
. A major advantage of speaking only
one
language
 is that communication will be easier for everybody. In most
of
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the
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cases,
people
 that
wants
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 to travel, study or work overseas have to learn a new
language
 in order to be able to communicate with others, but if English becomes a universal
language
 that will
not
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 be longer necessary.
Consequently
,
people
 will have
less
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 barriers and will be encouraged about discovering new cultures, working and studying in other countries and
making
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 new relationships. A
second
 advantage of having
one
language
 in the world will be that more
people
 will be employed
,
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 because a lot of countries have a lack of employees. Countries that struggle finding workers are usually the ones with exotic languages.
As a result
, with only
one
language
 many governments will not face job-related issues.
On the other hand
, having a universal
language
 will produce a loss
in
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 traditions and history, which will affect the tourism industry and
consequently
 part of the economy related to it.
As a result
, a lot of tourist places well known for their traditions that are related to their
language
 will become less special. In conclusion, having
one
language
 could help
people
 to grow professionally and personally, but it could
also
 bring negative effects
in
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 cultures and societies.
However
,
this
 phenomenon is not likely to occur.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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