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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
At
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 the present day, the age of technology is developing rapidly,
more
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and more
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 and more smartphone and laptop users try to take the advantage of e-
books
 and online
newspapers
.
Therefore
, traditional
newspapers
 and printed
books
 will disappear because everything will be available and
freely
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 download from the
Internet
.
From
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 my part, I completely agree with
this
 changing reading habit based on the following reasons below.
To begin
 with, reading
books
 online will protect the environment and prevent deforestation by reducing
cutting
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the cutting
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 down wood for producing
papers
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paper
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. It means that all information will be displayed
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on
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 the computer and phone screen
instead
 of
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on papers
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papers
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paper
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.
For instance
, modern
newspapers
 upload articles directly on the
Internet
 and stop using printed
newspapers
 which can reduce the cost of printing. The
second
 reason why
this
 issue is agreed upon is that we could easily find the
books
 or information we want to read after a few clicks and can
also
 comfortably share those with others. All images,
texts
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and texts
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 are stored in the huge storage of
Internet
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the Internet
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 cloud so
people
need
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 not a huge bookshelf or a large room to keep anymore.
For example
, teachers can share widely
to
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with
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 the whole class to study online after clicking the 'share' button without spending any effort. The final reason which is no less important is that it is easy for
people
 to change form words or customize the size of the letter to a suitable extent that makes us comfortable to read. Because we can't change the font in the printed
books
 which have very small letters that are hard to see.
For example
,
people
 can easily zoom in or zoom out the passages on the computer screen and copy or save
to
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 read later. In conclusion, I am convinced that in the future
people
 will completely use the
Internet
 newspaper and
books
instead
 of the traditional ones based on the reasons above. From
this
 point, the traditional library will be transformed into the electronic one which saves a huge amount of money and time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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