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In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents choosing to self-educate their children at home rather then sending them to school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the disadvantages?

#countries #parents #self-educate #children #home #school #education
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Nowadays, there is a tendency in different countries to provide
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home
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 education
instead
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 of
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school
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one
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for
children
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. While studying at
home
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 often leads to better
results
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 and low risk of social damage to a kid, poor planning
skills
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 and poor
communication
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 experience are drastically more important
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 of the
school
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avoidence
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avoidance
. Studying at
home
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 allows
children
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 to perform better due to an ability to spend more time
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working.
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, there is no reason to go to
school
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, so
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studying
studing
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studying
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 kids don't have to
spent
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 time
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travelling,
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, they could be less tired and be able to study harder every day.
This
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 usually leads to higher marks and better
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 on tests,
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,
children
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 learn better.
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,
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the lack
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 of the tough surrounding
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in
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 the
school
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 might help not to be mentally harmed. There are usually bullies at schools who torture weaker kids and damage their growing
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minds
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 and mental health by gaslighting,
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.
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,
unnessecity
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unnecessity
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peers prevents potential mental damage.
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,
lack
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a lack
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 of
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independence from
parential
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parental
 control may prevent or cancel the development of planning
skills
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.
Vast
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 majority of
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parents
does
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 not give a child a chance to choose what to study
,
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 but
makes
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make
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 plans and timetables for him or
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her
fer
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her
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 of his or her choices. In future,
children
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 may not be able to choose
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or
her
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their
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 own path and would meet problems with arranging a schedule.
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, avoiding contact with classmates or a teacher could destroy
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communication
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 potential of
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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. Because of the scarcity of
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communication
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 with any people
such
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skills
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 might stagnate and regress, in long-term perspective preventing any clear
communication
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 to occur,
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. To conclude, soft
skills
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as
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communication
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 and planning are the most valuable
results
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 from the
school
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 years than any knowledge in raw comparison,
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,
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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 of
home
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 education outweigh its benefits.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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