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In many countries, families are not eating meal together on a daily basis. Why it is ? Is it positive or negative development?

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These days, family
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 is one of the most crucial factors in parts of
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's lives. Recently,
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 spend less
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 eating together with their families than in the past. In my opinion, I think
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 is a negative development and will give rational explanations in
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 essay. Over five decades,
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 have completely changed their lifestyles in parts of work, which was normal
people
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 did agriculture leading to spending the most
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 with their families. Now what most
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 work is totally different from the past
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 as employees, teachers, doctors, or scientists. They barely have
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 with their family per day even at weekends, so talking about having a meal together absolutely isn't possible. They don't have
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 in common which is the main reason why most
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 are never eating breakfast, lunch, or dinner together. From my perspective, I think
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 situation is a negative development because it directly affects the relationship between members of the family. They will not close together as much as they should be. In the worst case, they could have depression because they cannot talk to their family when they have a huge problem in their mind. Clearly, we always receive news in the present day that many
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 almost died by suicide which could bring sadness to
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 who love them, especially their families.
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, I think
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 could bring us to an unhappy problem in society. In conclusion, it will be a negative development if
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 cannot spend
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 with family because of their
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 of job. It is one of the causes of mental issues for most
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 nowadays which is a serious problem that we have to fix immediately.

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