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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

There are substantial social and practical issues associated with living in a
country
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 where
one
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 must speak a foreign
language
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. I totally agree with
this
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 statement because the
language
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 barrier can cause isolation and misunderstanding for residents,
as well as
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 difficulties with the
country
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’s rules and systems.
One
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 of the main issues an individual may face when unable to speak the official
language
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 of a
country
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 is feeling both isolated and misunderstood. A person could be participating in a social event with a large group of people
but
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, but
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 may struggle to connect with others
due to
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 difficulty understanding local slang or expressions.
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, when attempting to convey an important point but failing to do so,
this
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 can lead to frustration and discouragement.
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, because laws and regulations differ from
one
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country
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 to another, a foreign resident might find it difficult to navigate how the system works. Rules regarding public transportation,
for instance
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, can be confusing for someone who does not speak the
language
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. They might get lost or arrive late to an important appointment. Even worse, it is possible to be fined simply for breaking a rule they did not understand. Life becomes challenging in
such
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 situations. In conclusion, unless
one
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 speaks the
language
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 of the
country
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 fluently, there will be challenges to face. These include social problems,
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 as feeling lonely,
as well as
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 practical issues, like unintentionally breaking a rule and receiving a fine for it.

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Task Response
In Task Response, the essay takes a clear side and gives reasons. To improve, add more ideas about social and practical effects and a small counterpoint to show balance.
Coherence and Cohesion
In Coherence and Cohesion, the order is clear and linking words help flow. Improve by making each paragraph have a strong topic sentence and a short conclusion.
Task Response
Clear stance and easy to see what the writer sits for.
Coherence and Cohesion
Good flow of ideas with linking words like Moreover and Furthermore.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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