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Today more and more tourists are visitin places where conditions are difficult , such as sahara desertor the Antartica. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the tourists who visit such places.

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Tourism is
of
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vital to humans and most
people
takes
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 it as part of their hobbies. In today's
era
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 lots of individuals
travels
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 a lot
especially
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at
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in
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the
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difficult cities
such
 as
Sahara
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the Sahara
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 desert or
the
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Antarctica. In
this
,the essay will elaborate on the pros and cons of visiting
such
places
.
Firstly
, let's look at the benefits
why
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of why
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 tourists visit
such
places
 regardless of the
risk
 that may occur.
Traveling
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Travelling
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 to
places
 is kind of fun especially when you embark with families and loved ones, and virtually for site seeing .
Furthermore
, tourism broadens
ones
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 knowledge about new
environment
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environments
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, cultures, and traditions
about
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in
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 some countries.
For example
, during the festive
season
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 lots of
people
 in the city of Owerri in Nigeria finds it interesting to travel to Calabar for their
canivals
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carnivals
were
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where
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 lots of
entertainments
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entertainment
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 are exhibited.
In addition
, various artists
comes
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 around to perform on stage with beautiful
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soundtracks
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sound tracks
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 of their music. Most often, some
people
 travel to different
places
 for business purposes. Most
people
 travel to learn new ideas and develop their societies respectively. Despite the
risk
,
people
finds
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 it interesting in visiting
places
 that are quite dangerous to
life
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 but to think of it, an author
known
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 as Ben Carson wrote a book titled take a
risk
.
This
 simply means that
risk
 is something
that is
 unavoidable if you want to become successful in life. Going into areas like the desert explores one into knowing species of wild and fun animals. Beautiful streams of rivers with cool weather and whistling
sound
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sounds
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 from birds are been heard.
On the other hand
, the downside involves
poor
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 security system ,
for example
, in Nigeria the security system is very poor bandits and kidnappers are after
people
's lives and
this
 could be
life threatening
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. In the aspect of tourism in desert
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areas
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area
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 wild animals can attack and
injury
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injure
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 someone and
also
 there could be
Lack
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 of proper diet and good water supply. In summary, travelling to difficult
places
 by tourists witness have the upside and downside, in the quest to explore around the world, one has to be
guilded
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guided
 on
places
 to visit to avoid
harassement
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harassment
 from kidnappers , bandits and other
inconvieneces
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inconveniences
 that may arise.
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