Today more and more tourists are visitin places where conditions are difficult , such as sahara desertor the Antartica. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the tourists who visit such places.
Tourism is
of
vital to humans and most Change preposition
apply
people
takes
it as part of their hobbies. In today's Correct subject-verb agreement
take
era
lots of individuals Add a comma
,era
travels
a lot Change the verb form
travel
especially
Add the comma(s)
,especially
at
Change preposition
in
the
difficult cities Correct article usage
apply
such
as Sahara
desert orCorrect article usage
the Sahara
the
Antarctica. In Correct article usage
apply
this
,the essay will elaborate on the pros and cons of visiting such
places
.
Firstly
, let's look at the benefits why
tourists visit Change preposition
of why
such
places
regardless of the risk
that may occur. Traveling
to Change the spelling
Travelling
places
is kind of fun especially when you embark with families and loved ones, and virtually for site seeing .
Furthermore
, tourism broadens ones
knowledge about new Change to a genitive case
one's
environment
, cultures, and traditions Fix the agreement mistake
environments
about
some countries. Change preposition
in
For example
, during the festive season
lots of Add a comma
,season
people
in the city of Owerri in Nigeria finds it interesting to travel to Calabar for their canivals
Correct your spelling
carnivals
were
lots of Correct your spelling
where
entertainments
are exhibited.
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entertainment
In addition
, various artists comes
around to perform on stage with beautiful Change the verb form
come
Correct your spelling
soundtracks
sound tracks
of their music. Most often, some Correct your spelling
soundtracks
people
travel to different places
for business purposes. Most people
travel to learn new ideas and develop their societies respectively. Despite the risk
, people
finds
it interesting in visiting Change the verb form
find
places
that are quite dangerous to life
but to think of it, an author Replace the word
live
known
as Ben Carson wrote a book titled take a Add the auxiliary verb
is known
risk
. This
simply means that risk
is something that is
unavoidable if you want to become successful in life. Going into areas like the desert explores one into knowing species of wild and fun animals. Beautiful streams of rivers with cool weather and whistling sound
from birds are been heard.
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sounds
On the other hand
, the downside involves poor
security system , Correct article usage
a poor
for example
, in Nigeria the security system is very poor bandits and kidnappers are after people
's lives and this
could be life threatening
. In the aspect of tourism in desert Add a hyphen
life-threatening
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areas
area
wild animals can attack and Add a comma
,area
injury
someone and Correct your spelling
injure
also
there could be Lack
of proper diet and good water supply.
In summary, travelling to difficult Correct article usage
a Lack
places
by tourists witness have the upside and downside, in the quest to explore around the world, one has to be guilded
on Correct your spelling
guided
places
to visit to avoid harassement
from kidnappers , bandits and other Correct your spelling
harassment
inconvieneces
that may arise.Correct your spelling
inconveniences
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