Wealth and material belongings often measure the success that a person has. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What make a successful person?

It is argued that richness and material
prossessions
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possessions
are the frequent
indication
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that an individual is successful.I
oppine
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opine
opined
that
been
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affluent is the best way to show
successfullness
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successfulness
.
However
,other factors
such
as
stable
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job and marriage
makes
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an individuals
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an individual
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successful.
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essay will explain in detail the reason for my stance as well as elements
what
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that
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makes someone successful in the subsequent paragraphs with examples.
To begin
with,having money shows the success of an individual.
This
can be seen by the number of mansions and luxury cars they own.If the individual is not successful they will not buy additional buildings and vehicles.In
additions
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,having a lot of companies indicate the
successfullness
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successfulness
.They achieve that through the
hardwork
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hard work
and determination.To be rich an individual
have
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to work hard to earn a living.
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without
wihout
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Without
money they can lead a good life and achieve their dreams.
For example
,to buy an expensive house,a person
need
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to have a lot of money.They live
extravagant
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an extravagant
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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by visiting nice tourist
site
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.
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example
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a lot
lot
alot
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a lot
of businessmen go to
dubai
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for holiday.
meanwhile
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those who are not financially stable still
works
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hard to be rich.
Secondly
,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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