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Today, in spite of the scientifically proven necessity of life-long learning, the idea that innate intelligence (thinking skills) is enough to have a successful life is dominating the minds of people.   Why is this the case?  What can be done about this problem?

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Natural
intelligence
 has always been an incredibly sought-after trait, but is it enough to guarantee lifelong
success
?
Although
 science has proven
otherwise
, many still insist it does.
This
 essay will establish how societal stereotypes are the cause of
this
, and the role teachers play in rectifying
this
 obsolete way of thinking.
Firstly
, cultural and educational norms teach us that individuals gifted with
intelligence
 will naturally excel in life.
This
 is particularly apparent within the education system. Where children who seemingly succeed with ease based on their
intelligence
 alone, are praised relentlessly. In comparison, students who expel huge efforts and time to achieve similar results, are disregarded.
For example
, in my school children in the top sets were viewed with higher regard compared to the bottom set of children, irrespective of their
success
 at school. Seldom, did teachers treat them with the respect they deserved
.
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Moreover
, the most paramount task in unravelling ancient ideals is to teach students from a young age what qualities are truly beneficial.
That is
 to say, refraining from overly praising
success
 is achieved only through
intelligence
 in exchange for applauding the dedication and exemplary work ethic. If greatness is what you seek, it will only be achieved through purposeful commitment. Apprenticeships,
for instance
, prove
this
 fact in that teenagers, with less than ideal
intelligence
, are still able to heed great
success
. In conclusion,
although
 for years, the opinion of society has been that
intelligence
 alone can afford you huge
success
, work must be done in our education system to rectify
this
 ideal, instilling more useful attributes like work ethic
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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