In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partners. Discuss both systems and state which you think is better.

Marriage
is one of the most important
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in
people
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whole life as it means that they are no longer
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to face
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the
diffical
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difficult
difficulty
or stress.
People
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suppose
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supose
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supposed
can choose their own
marriage
partners
. But in some countries, parents will arrange
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marriage
partner for their
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children
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childrens
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children
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.
First
of all, some parents might think that they are helping their
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children
childrens
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children
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to decide the better
partners
as they live longer
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that
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than
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them.
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, they think they can make a great
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for them through their
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experience
experent
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experience
. So, it can
aviod
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avoid
them to meet the wrong person who might not able to let their children happy and comfortable.
On the other hand
,
people
can choose what they really want if
people
choose their own
marriage
partners
. They have to take
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responsible for themself
for
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the future, so they can know which person is better or
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suitable
sutiable
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suitable
for them to
marriage
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. In conclusion, I think
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definitely
definately
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definitely
people
can choose their own
marriage
partners
is better for anyone. There
are
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only one person who can
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truly
surely
turely
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truly
awere
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aware
were
what they really want which is themself.
Therefore
, why do not we pick a guy we loved and be with them to enjoy the rest of the time
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