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In the future, it seems it will be more difficult to live on the earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching other planets to live, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays,people think that we should spend more money to research
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other planets to live on other planets
such
 as Mars or
moon
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. Because of it seems it would be more difficult to live on the
earth
.
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 on the several reasons for the government should spend money on researching other planets. Search is increasing in birth rate,increase in
sea water
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seawater
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 level,volcanic eruption and destruction of
earth
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.
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global warming
the
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one of the major threats on the
earth
. As the
earth
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 temperature
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 dramatically because of cutting down the trees in the forest, uses of cars and traffic
jam
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, factories and manufacturing goods. But the government could spend more money to control these things.
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, the government could start awareness among people 2
useless
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use less
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 energy and produce less waste.
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 people should use public transport so they could reduce
chance
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 of traffic
jam
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 and
use
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 of fuel
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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