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There are many people who go to live in different countries. To what extent should people be allowed to move freely between countries and live where they choose? What are the benefits and drawbacks of this?

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It is argued that individuals should possess the freedom to migrate from one part of the world to the other. Personally, I largely agree that
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 should have the right to reside in areas of their choice. In
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. Critics of
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 idea contend that without any policy to restrict the number of residents, metropolis may be under too much burden, allowing too many immigrants to live there. That means there would be no adequate resources for education, medicine and accommodation in megacities if
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 were allowed to rush into these areas.
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 like Beijing and New York seem to experience
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 trend currently, with concrete jungles built to keep up with the increasing population surging into
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, the
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 market and the cost of living in large
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 can help to mitigate
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 less capable
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 the area.
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, no policy is needed to restrict
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's movement while the market will regulate the trend in a more subtle way. Without certain limits on migration,
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 can enjoy great benefits brought about by free movement. The key one is that the experience of living in distinct countries for several years definitely enrich
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's life, as they encounter more culture and customs.
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, living near the North Pole allows
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 to be
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 to express snow and how to use
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 to hunt.
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, it is not without drawbacks. The major one is that it might trigger more
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 to move and live in large
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the extremely high population intensity might cause discomfort living in those areas. In conclusion, there should not be any policies banning
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 from moving to other countries.
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 might bring both advantages and disadvantages to the population.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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