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Some people think that children should start school as early as possible, while others believe that they should start school at the age of seven. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays the competition between children has become strong so some
people
 think the
kids
 should go to
school
 at an earlier age than others.In my opinion, I think the
kids
 can go to
school
 at 7
years
 old. On the one hand, some
people
 think the
kids
 need to go to
school
 at a younger age because they can learn more than other children and beat them when they group up.
For example
, some
kids
 go went to kindergarten when they are 4
years
 old and the teacher there taught them some basic math.After they join elementary
school
 the
kids
 who went to kindergarten before could get a higher score than others.So some
people
 send their children to
school
 when they are young.
On the other hand
, some
people
 do not send their
kids
 to
school
 before 7
years
 old because they think
kids
 need to explore the world in childhood. The luxury time will decline dramatically after they join the
school
 and there are too many things, like how to cooperate with
people
, ride a bike, that
are
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 more important than
school
 works so they need to spend lots of time exploring nor go to
school
.So some parents think
kids
 should start to go to
school
 at the age of 7. To summarize,in my opinion, I think
kids
 should go to
school
 at seven
years
 old because they need to spend numerous of time exploring the world
although
 they probably cannot beat their classmates who went to
school
 earlier.But they will get a variety of different life experiences and memories through the process explore the world.
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