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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar
chart
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 and pie
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illustrate
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pineapple
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 production exported internationally by three developing peak countries in 2009 and 2019. It is clearly stated that
country
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 A contributed the highest fruit consumption in 2019, specializing in
pineapple
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. In the same year, the biggest proportion accounted
in
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 the distribution and retail with regard to the expenditure on each
pineapple
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. Looking more closely at the bar
chart
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, we can see that there was unpredictably fluctuation among three countries in 2009. In detail, around 1 million pineapples are exported in
country
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 A. Surprisingly progressed in
country
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 B, the amount of
pineapple
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 transshipped was rocketed to over 4 million, which is considered the highest transport of them all.
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,
country
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 C stood at the bottom in exporting
pineapple
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 outside of the
country
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 for less than 1 million. According to the pie
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, distributing and retailing
pineapple
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 was the key consideration for 35 per cent of
pineapple
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 cost. Speaking of taxes and profit, there was just a minor concern to consumers, calculated at 16 per cent and 18 per cent respectively.
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, almost less than twelve people wondered about international export, import licences, producer, and export costs.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Pattern
  • Fluctuation
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparison
  • Relationship
  • Correlation
  • Significant
  • Implication
  • Prediction
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