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In recent years, there has been a rise in the popularity of second hand clothing amongst younger generations. Why is this happening? Do you think it's a positive or negative development?

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Recently there has been a rise in the popularity of
second
-hand
clothes
 among younger people. There are many reasons behind that and I think that it is a good thing as it reduces waste . So it has a positive effect on
development
. In
this
 ,
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Firstly
 teenagers prefer it as it is cheap and reasonable for them. They want to save as money as much possible to buy other things they are interested in
such
 as games, tickets and food. So they purchase used
clothes
 for
this
.
For example
, if they want to follow the new factions so they get to the newest factions for a decent price.
Furthermore
, teenagers want to try new things so they get
second
-hand
clothes
 as it gives them the opportunity to have a
lot
 of new
clothes
 . All these effects of course the
development
. One of the effects is that it reduces the industry and
this
 leads to reduce the number of workers at that factory since it does not make a
lot
 of
clothes
 . So some people will not be able to find a job in
this
 area of industry.
On the other hand
, It reduces the waste of energy and products and
this
 helps to protect our planet and our environment. In conclusion, Today's young people purchase a
lot
 of used
clothes
 because of many reasons.
This
 has a
lot
 of effects on
development
. I think that it is a positive thing for
development
.
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