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In recent years, there has been a rise in the popularity of second hand clothing amongst younger generations. Why is this happening? Do you think it's a positive or negative development?

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Recently there has been a rise in the popularity of
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 among younger people. There are many reasons behind that and I think that it is a good thing as it reduces waste . So it has a positive effect on
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 teenagers prefer it as it is cheap and reasonable for them. They want to save as money as much possible to buy other things they are interested in
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 as games, tickets and food. So they purchase used
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, if they want to follow the new factions so they get to the newest factions for a decent price.
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, teenagers want to try new things so they get
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 as it gives them the opportunity to have a
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 of new
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 . All these effects of course the
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. One of the effects is that it reduces the industry and
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 leads to reduce the number of workers at that factory since it does not make a
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 of
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 . So some people will not be able to find a job in
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 area of industry.
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, It reduces the waste of energy and products and
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 helps to protect our planet and our environment. In conclusion, Today's young people purchase a
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 of used
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 because of many reasons.
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 of effects on
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. I think that it is a positive thing for
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