Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Some
students
want to study
other subjects
despite their main study
,while
some students
think that they should pay attention to their main subjects
because it is essential for them. In my opinion, additional subjects
can bring the same qualities and benefits as main subjects
and will not disrupt students
in their studies.
On the one hand, additional subjects
bring opportunities for students
. The vast majority of universities have facultative subjects
,where students
can study
foreign languages or plunge into their lovely subjects
. Also
, it is a good chance to choose new hobbies or find a future plan for a master's degree. For example
, Bahçeşehir University promotes students
,where they can learn new skills in engineering,computer science and linguistics. Many of them decide to choose other courses in the hope of finding new fields to study
. Another benefit,exploring new languages,which is helpful for people who want to study
abroad. For instance
, Moscow University has been promoting students
for the Erasmus program,which constantly gives opportunities to explore new countries and develop their knowledge. Moreover
, it is a chance to encourage students
to study
hard to attain their dreams and achieve their goals.
On the other hand
, it is a hard process for students
.Plenty of students
,who have been studying in facultative ways have lost their motivation to study
main subjects
fruitfully,because of lack of time and energy. This
work undoubtedly requires power and motivation,however
,our organism can not carry out these tasks. Furthermore
,this
process can lead to depression, apathy and other mental issues. For example
, a recent survey in Moscow showed that many students
,who have a desire to go overseas for study
,lose their motivation to work hard on their main studies,which constantly leads to losing their degree and strength. However
, any type of study
requires strength and ability to work hard and this
period should encourage people to take advantage and gain valuable experience.
To sum up
, with no doubt main subjects
are crucial and students
should emphasize that,however
,the facultative approach can lead to having chances to find new hobbies and activities. Moreover
,this
chance can promote studying overseas and gaining an international degreeSubmitted by batirka06 on
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Incorporate a wider range of linking words and phrases to show contrasts, cause and effect, and to add emphasis, improving the essay's coherence.
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Further develop your conclusion by summarizing both views and clearly restating your own stance, providing a more rounded finish to your essay.
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You've effectively discussed both views on the importance of studying additional subjects aside from the main subjects at university.
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Relevant examples such as Bahçeşehir University and Moscow University add credibility to your arguments.
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Your essay structure is logical, with a clear division between paragraphs discussing different viewpoints.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
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