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Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists rather than local people. Why is this? What can be done to encourage local people to visit museums and historical sites?

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of
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the
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tourist
places
 have many museums as well as
sites
 of historical relevance.
However
,
such
places
 are majorly visited by foreign visitors rather than the
localites
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localities
locality
.
This
 essay intends to discuss the reasons behind
this
 phenomenon, and suggest some ways to ameliorate
this
 problem before drawing a reasonable conclusion. To commence with, there are myriad
of
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reasons why
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 of visitors prefer to go to historical
sites
.
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first
 and foremost is that they are fascinated by these new
places
 and in order to explore and learn more about the culture of the host country they pay a visit to these
places
. Local individuals,
on the other hand
, do not have anything extraordinary to view at
such
sites
 and museums as they do not undergo regular upgradation.
As a result
, they find it sheer wastage of their money. Moving
further
, several steps can be taken to influence local people to go to
sites
 with historical relevance. The
first
 step could be providing free-of-cost entry to individuals belonging to nearby areas.
For instance
, the Art
museum
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 in sector 10 Chandigarh, invites students from local schools to visit it without charging any money.
This
 attracts children's parents as well.
Moreover
, historical
sites
 should be maintained and renovated from time to time so that residents of local areas visit them more often. In conclusion, I reiterate that
although
 historical monuments and museums attract more visitors because they do not undergo regular changes, still authorities can attract local people
also
 by improving these
places
 and providing free entry on specific days.
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