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Some People Believe That Children Should Not Be Given Homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #children #homework #teachers #role #education
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It is widely discussed that
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 the tutors should not assign any assignments to young
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, while the rest believe that it has a significant role in
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 studies.
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view points
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 before proposing my
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. In one
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dimension
,
homework
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 makes
children
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's life more
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stressful
stressfull
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stressful
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This
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 is because
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 on
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average
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 they are spending 10 hours at school and during their time at school many
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 active levels in
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 will gradually
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. With
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addition
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the addtion
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addtion
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addition
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homework
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 most
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the
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youngsters feel miserable.
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 there was a
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research
reasearch
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 conducted on young
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 by Fobes magazine to
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 about their thought on assignments, 89% of teens felt
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stressful
 because of the
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. On top of that, youngsters are not getting extra time to concentrate on other activities like sports, which will be
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 loss for their future.
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,
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 is
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 way to habituate to studies. As
children
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 will be repeating or rewriting what they have learned in their classrooms.
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, nursery students are at the beginning of
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 career
in
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studies so the best way that they can remember is
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to write
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 their
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 multiple times.
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, students won't be afraid of facing exams. As they are well prepared by doing their
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. In conclusion, Assigning
homework
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 can be
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stressful
stressfull
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stressful
 and a blocker for developing leisure activities, they can
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 be helpful in adapting to education and can
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 remove fear among the
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. In my
opinion
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 it has both pros and cons, so I would like to suggest that teachers and parents should put some
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in
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 guiding
children
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 in the right way.
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