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Technology affects our daily lives. Give examples of how technology help us and discuss any disadvantages that it may bring

The life in 21st century is so much dominated by
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, that it is incorporated into our daily lives.
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 discuss how the
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 is useful to
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 and ,
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 it will
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 discuss the other side of
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 which can cause adverse effects. Nowadays,
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 has replaced the traditional methods of work in factories.
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, the advanced pieces of machinery in the factories cause minimal labour work, and fewer errors in packaging and sorting when compared to
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.
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 due to alternative machines by
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, there are zero accidents in the factory or at construction sites. Earlier,
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 used to uplift heavy items
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 as wood logs, rocks and so physically but, now with advanced machines the work is simplified and
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 are relieved from
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 burden.
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, easy access to the
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 has been a boon to everybody. Let us take the example of the
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 replacing the newspaper. As more and more
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 are turning towards E-news, a tremendous amount of paper has been saved. According to a study in the United Kingdom, more than half the population uses E-newspapers which
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 led to an approximately a 20% fall in paper production. ,
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 nature is preserved making the environment clean. Another most common use of the
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 is easy communication with distant
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. Earlier
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 use to write letters to
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 living far away which would take days to deliver a letter to them. But with the advancement in
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, now
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 can connect with each other even within minutes if they are far across the country.
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, the economy of the country is boosted due to infrastructure and advanced automobiles.
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 trading between the countries is now easily possible. According to the statistics in the United States Of America, the trading system has dramatically improved from 1800 to 2000.
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,
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 does have its few adverse effects
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 as replacing
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 in the factories resulting in increased unemployment in the countries. Another downfall of
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 is the addiction of
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 to the
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 leading to less communication with
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 surrounding us.
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 often chat with those who are far away and may not meet them in future rather than talking to
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 sitting
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 to them.
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, the rate of diseases
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 as obesity and cardiac diseases have noticeably increased due to a sedentary lifestyle.
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 use automobiles for walkable distances or sit in front of computers for most time of the day leading to an inactive lifestyle. In summary, even though
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technology
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 is a boon to
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, it has its own downfall. In my opinion, if we limit ourselves to using the
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 only when required rather than for instant gratification it can be fruitful for us.

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