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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The pie chart illustrates the
proportion
 of different
water
 used in 2000 all over the world. And the bar chart compares
the
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water
 consumption by four countries, namely Canada, New Zealand, India and China. It is noticeable that the
proportion
 of agriculture dominated more than the other forms of using
water
. For the usage of
water
 by different countries, India and china consumed
water
on
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 agriculture over 65%.
However
, Canada demonstrated
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totoally
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totally
 different
proportion
 of
water
use
, it consumed 80%
on
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industry
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, which is higher than any other
forms
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 of
water
use
. Compared with Canada and India, New
zealand
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remain
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 relatively average
use
 on each
use
, 44% and 46% consumed by agriculture and
indusry
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industry
 respectively.It is
also
 clear that the
water
use
 on domestic in New Zealand represented the highest
proportion
than
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 other nations.
Nevertheless
, there is an obvious difference
on
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water
 consumption between
four
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 countries in 2000.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, water, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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