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Parents should be held legally responsible for their children’s acts. What is your opinion? Support it with personal example.

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In many nations around the world, people until fourteen or sixteen years old don'
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 bear any responsibility according to the law. It is often suggested, that
parents
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 should take amenability for their kids at
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 time. Actually, I absolutely agree with
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 point of view, as I believe that it will be helpful for the whole society, if there won'
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 be any activity, for which is no one responsible.
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 of all,
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 are the driving forces behind the behaviour of their own kind. Every act is done
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 education of a person, and most of the worse things happen because of a lack of child raising. Imagine,
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, a boy would take a book from the library without checking it in, it means
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 book would be stolen. But if the boy doesn'
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 know, that he had to check it in, because his
parents
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 don'
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 explain to him
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 simple process, it goes without saying that he isn'
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 guilty and in
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 case
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 the fault of his
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.
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, because of human nature, every young person is interested in something that he had never done before and they learn by trial and error. If teenagers know that nobody is responsible for the awful things they want to do, probably they will try it.
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, they will never do it, if they will be sure that someone they love will have consequences,
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, if their mother or father would have to pay a fine. In conclusion, I am sure that it is should be obligatory across the board to hold amenability for own kids, as it can significantly help to decrease the number of illegal actions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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