Governments should offer college and university education free of charge to all students.

It has been stated that as every citizen should have an equal opportunity to follow higher
education
, the government should allow
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all
students
to attend
colleges
and
universities
free of charge.
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, governments should assume the burden
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, I take the view that it can bring many benefits for both individuals and
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society as
whole
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. Some people are of the opinion that governments should invest more money in
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of
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instead
of providing college and university free of charge. To commence, with many learners being not interested in educating and being unwilling to educate an academic path, the
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budget will be
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as
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a waste of money. To clarify, if
government
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make more budget for
colleges
and
universities
, they should shoulder the heavy burden of financing
universities
. On top of that, with many citizens facing different problems in
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society,
government
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should allocate more amount of money to spend on more infrastructures and important areas of public services
such
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a
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reliable public transport and other communications means, public health care services
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for senior, as well as recreational facilities for the entire society
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merely the university student.
However
, governments should take more
responsibilities
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on
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colleges
and
universities
owning to all
students
, the advantages of
this
issue outweigh its disadvantages.
First
and foremost,
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many talented
students
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living
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in
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area
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significant financial challenges,
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not affordable to pay tuition fees for following their
educations
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, which can inevitably force them to give up their
aspiration
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and
education
. If they are not obliged to pay tuition fees, they can pursue their
education
without any concerns and concentrate on their studies in order to cultivate natural talents regarding
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financial matters.
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, a lot of
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start
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and reputation musicians
as well as outstanding scientists not only they
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could realize the untapped
their
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potential but
also
,
they
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could flourish their talent only by pursuing their
educating
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.
Likewise
, only through
universities
and
colleges
can
students
get acquired valuable
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skills
such
as communication skills and intellectual skills.
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, many job vacancies and
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companied
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are employed knowledgeable post-graduation, so
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it is logical
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everyone
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access to free college and university
education
. In conclusion,
Although
this
approach can negative
impacts
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on governments’
budget
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, I reaffirm my idea because
of
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all
students
have the right to get hold of good access to higher
education
opportunities no matter what their financial status is.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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