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Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way.

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Generally, high usage of social media by the younger generation will create a distance from their family members. When adults start to spend more time on social media applications, it will certainly degrade communication with their parents.
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, my cousin used to play " The Game of Thrones" for a long time, and his communication with his wife started to decrease.
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, education of the young people distracted a lot. Due to the enormous ,time spent on social media obtains
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