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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people,however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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For every
country
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 control of their developing success is important. Unless there are a lot of
progress
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 criteria for measurement of success in different development areas had been framed, many governments pay attention only to the economy. But is
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 in the economic field the most important for a
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?
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 of all, the finance constituent of a
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's development influences almost all other
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 measurements.
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, if the economic growth of a
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 is slowing down, it means, that the level of medicine is
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 low. Despite
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, other types of
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such
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 as the level of medicine, the environmental stage or the index of unemployment are for the
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’s inhabitants more important.
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, it couldn’t be forgotten, that the main goal of the government’s strategies is to make human life as excellent as possible. Even if economic
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 would be higher than ever, people need a good system of public services to support themself. In order of
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, the happiness index has been framed, which shows the people’s satisfaction with their life. It balances all
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 values.
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, Sweden has currently the highest value in
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 criteria, but
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 levels of medicine or environmental stage are there astonishingly high. In conclusion, it goes without saying that finances are the driving forces behind
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 in all developing areas.
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, I would argue that the happiness index is the most important for the inhabitants of a
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 and I am sure, that governments should make
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 the main measurement of development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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