Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays,
People
want to reduce the time
traveling
to Change the spelling
travelling
work
, moreover
, some people
think the best way is to remove parks
and gardens
from the city center
with apartment buildings for Change the spelling
centre
people
who work
in the center
. I think building new apartment buildings is a good idea to reduce the Change the spelling
centre
time
to go to work
, but I do not mostly agree to remove the parks
and gardens
from the center
. The essay would share why I mostly disagree with the case.
Change the spelling
centre
Firstly
, removing the parks
and gardens
from the center
can get more space to build more apartments, which can sell to Change the spelling
centre
people
who are working downtown. Those apartments are very necessary for the workers because they can get home earlier and have more free time
to take a break. For instance
, my father lives in a house which is far from his company, and he must travel around one hour to work
every weekday, so that was the reason he looks tired when he came home. In addition
, he can have more time
to relax if he removes to an apartment nearby his company.
On the other hand
, parks
and gardens
are the best places for those children to be close to nature. They have to spend a lot of time
traveling
to a place where close to nature if the Change the spelling
travelling
parks
and gardens
disappeared. For example
, The children want to picnic in a park but their city does not have any parks
, so those children always spend a lot of time
going to parks
in other cities.
In conclusion, I understand the workers want to reduce the time
of traveling
to Change the spelling
travelling
work
, but I think should have a better way to solve the problem without removing the parks
and gardens
. These places are filled with memories of childhood of people
, so I hope they can keep these public places well and find out another idea to deal with the problem.Submitted by gac7077 on
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