In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Could this trend have more positive or negative effects on the society?

In the various countries
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over the world
in
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nowadays, the percentage of
senior
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citizen
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is regularly
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. In my opinion, I believe
this
trend
brings more negative
aspects
than positive
aspects
. On the one hand, when the proportion of elder people is progressively,
then
the young generations
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will
brings
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burden
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on their
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related to
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and
pensioner
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pensioners
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.
Firstly
, If the pensioner is more than the
taxpayer
, it will lead to pressure comes on the youth which results in
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unstable
financial
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. In china which
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highest
population
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the world,
for example
, the percentage of
senior
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citizen is more than
young
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generation,
this
mean
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that it created
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to financial crisis and put
an
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unnecessary on the youth when they have to burden
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money from
taxpayer
for older people.
As a result
,
this
will lead to unbalance related to
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for
this countries
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and its almost between
taxpayer
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and retired
person
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.
On the other hand
,
this
trend
also
has
a positive
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a positive aspect
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aspects
when the young generations are
guidanced
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guided
guidance
by senior citizens who rich experiments in various fields.
To begin
with, there are
centain
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certain
the
population
of geriatric who are contribute largely for financial
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.Bill Gates who is
billionaire
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over the world,
for instance
,
he
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belong
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to
geriatric
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population
, but he
have
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been provided various knowledge
such
as science, technology
or
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financial economy for the young generation,
these
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him
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knowledge is usefully for the
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understanding
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clearly in one of
this
field. In conclusion,
although
, the advantage of
this
trend
can provide
an
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valuable experiment for the young generations from senior citizens.
Conversely
, the budget of
nation
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play
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an
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crucial role in the development of one country.
Therefore
,
this
trend
bring
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more drawbacks
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outweigh
outweight
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outweigh
the positive
aspects
because
the
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unbalance between
taxpayer
and pensioner.
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