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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is argued that they should be recruited to serve their home
countries
 where they have taken their training, whilst others think that they have the right to
work
 wherever they like. I believe that
although
 physicians and engineers cost quite much money to become well trained, they have the right to immigrate to another
country
 after working for a certain period in their
countries
. Some people think that states should keep their skilled workers in their
countries
 and prevent them from
traveling
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 because they trained them for free.
This
 means that they have to spend their whole life working in their
countries
 and never give permission to
work
 outside their
countries
.
For example
, China prevents its skilled workers from leaving their
countries
.
However
, I believe it is unhuman to keep citizens in their
countries
 against their will.
Instead
, it is better to permit them after serving their
countries
 for a certain number of years after their graduation. Others argue that governments should allow their physicians and engineers to choose to
work
 inside or outside their home
country
 as it is their right to decide.
This
 means that
although
 the governments spend taxpayers’ resources to train these types of careers, these graduates should not be prevented from working in another
country
.
For instance
, the Egyptian government gives them the freedom to
work
 in another
country
 after spending an obligatory period working in underserved areas.
Therefore
, I believe that doctors and engineers should pay back
this
 money by working for a certain time in their
countries
 before leaving. In conclusion, based on the mentioned points above, I believe that the best solution to be fair is that governments should permit their skilled workers to
work
 abroad after working for their
countries
 for a certain number of years as a kind of return of service.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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